Hello there. My name Tommy. I go to Waitohu School. I’m a Year 5 and I’m 9 years old. At school I have a lot of friends like Keanu, Oscar, Augie, Caleb and KJ. I love Grand Theft Auto 5, Roblox, Fortnite and Minecraft. I have 3 siblings. One called Bari, she's the one that moved out and is 21. Next I have two twins, their names are Leo and Sophia. They are both 6 years old. I have 2 pets, one's a kitten and the other is a dog. Their names are Trumpet and Deuce and of course a mum and a dad, and their names are Richard and Anna. I live in a big house just down the road from my school. That's really all about me.
hi Tommy it was very good I like what you did to your photo I like it . mabe you could make some longer sentences.
ReplyDeleteHi Tommy, your story is quite interesting. You can improve by talking about your hobbies, and perhaps not too much about the video games that you like to play. Also, I think that your sentances are a bit short, and you can start with something other than the word 'I'.
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